Pomfrey application

[Madame Pomfrey]

Character Name (first, middle, last)- Poppy Emma Pomfrey
Age? - 26
Any nicknames? - Pommie
House (where were they sorted)?- Hufflepuff

Wand (size, wood, core)- 14' Rose wood Phoenix Feather
Pets (Species, Name)- Jar Jar a tawny owl
What does their Boggart portray?- An incurable patient
Are they able to preform a Patronus?- Yes
What form does it take? Otter
Can they see thestrals? Well working in a hospital for 6 years, duh,

Hair Color/Style/Length- Medium, Brown and Curly
Eye Color- Brown
Height- 5'2
Body Type (thin, curvy, overweight, etc...)- curvy
Skin Tone (pale, tan, dark...) pale

Good Personality Traits- Motherly, caring and Kind

Bad Personality Traits- Over Bearing and too smothering and a work a holic

Habits, both good and bad- chewing fingernails and helping

Birthplace- Surrey
Parents Names- Kayla and Patterson Pomfrey
Parents Careers- Healers and dress fitter
Siblings- Verona Pomfrey
Blood type (half, muggleborn, pure)- half

History (Where did they come from? Did they have a good Childhood? Bad? How did they spend their time as a child?)-
Playing with medical kits and mothering Verona, her baby sister. Madame Pomfrey was loved by her mother and father and was a studious child because of this she was bullied and has since then put her efforts into the welfare of Children.


Describe your character in three words- Motherly, Clucky and Overbearing

Describe how your character feels about the following things-

*Muggleborns- fine, I still look after them

*Pure bloods- same as above

*Gay Marriage- erm, not my place

*Death- is part of life

*Alcohol- Messes children up

*Drugs- read above

*Religion- Catholic

*Children- are adorable little things


What does your character smell when they inhale Ammortia? Cough potions, skelegrow and plaster

Do they have any family within the Castle? no

Do they support, or fight against, Voldemort and his forces? I don't have any

And finally, what is their favorite candy from Honey dukes (Random, I know...)? Candy-aids

[Headmistress]

Before I make any changes to your profile, can I have a Roleplay Example?

It can be any situation, and you can post it below or PM it to me.

[Madame Pomfrey]

Madam Pomfrey paced the beds of the hospital wing, clucking her tongue and tucking in the occasional student.
Madame Pomfrey had a great love for the students at Hogwarts.

A small boy came in with a nosebleed as she finished giving skele-grow to Eveleen, a regular here at the Hospital wing.
"How on earth did you get that child?" She exclaimed as she examined the boys bruises and bumps. "What on Earth has been happening here?" She asked in curiosity, never-mind, Well come here." She said bossily pulling the boy in as she bent down. "Episkey!" she muttered, she was too sleepy to be snappy. sending the boy on his way as the nose was fixed.

She smiled a wry smile as she turned to prepare the hiccup potion she'd need tomorrow. Those accident prone third years were practicing hiccup solutions in potions tomorrow *sigh*.

Thanks for the ideas Narcissa. And the help Headmistress.

[Narcissa Black]

Wow... okay...
1) Is that even an RP? I would highly suggest taking a look at some of the ones on the site, mainly Bellatrix, Scarlett, and Narcissa--yes me.
2) I like how you had her think ahead to the next day, that's good, but maybe have her interacting with someone. Like, a kid had been brought in with a nosebleed. What would she do for him? And you make her out as motherly, which is fine. But she's pushy. She doesn't let others in while students are being treated, most of the time.

I dunno about you Headmistress, but I'd have her redo it. And I'm not sure, but if you're applying for another account, you'd better work a bit harder. Not everyone will put up with short, inaccurate posts.

Best of Luck.

[Headmistress]

Can you re-submit your RP using proper grammar and sentence structure?

If you need help, PM me.

[Madame Pomfrey]

Is it better?

[Narcissa Black]

I apologize if it was snappy, lol. Didn't mean to offend...

[Madame Garfungle]

's okay.

[Headmistress]

Madam Pomfrey paced the beds of the hospital wing. Clucking her tongue and tucking in the occasional student.

I believe that should only be one sentence.

She smiled a motherly smile as she turned to prepare the hiccup potion she'd need tomorrow because the third years were practicing hiccup solutions in potions tomorrow.

That should have a comma in there somewhere... or be split into two sentences.
You also missed a few Quotation marks, and there were a couple more tiny errors in the rest of your RP.

Onto your application itself, its got the same feel as your very first RP example. Too sweet, while Pomfrey's character is more overbearing.
Her age also seems to young... though I suppose that's because this is Maurader Age.

You don't have to make her mean, or even as pushy as she is in the books... Seeing as this portrays her thirty years prior, it could be she got that way over time. But, even so, you need to rework her character to fit her personality. Also, her History section is verrrry short. Can you be more descriptive?

[Madame Pomfrey]

both are changed. ;D

[Headmistress]

What exactly did you change in her Application itself? I can't seem to find much...

And for her RP... I'll give you one more chance to submit it without grammatical problems. Commas and Quotation Marks seem to be whats missing most of all... As a staff member, you need to have really good posts... grammar, spelling, and all.

[Madame Garfungle]

Madam Pomfrey paced the beds of the hospital wing, clucking her tongue and tucking in the occasional student.
Madame Pomfrey had a great love for the students at Hogwarts. Even though it sometimes wore thin.

A small boy came in with a nosebleed as she finished giving skele-grow to Eveleen, a regular here at the Hospital wing.
"How on earth did you get that child?" She exclaimed as she examined the boys bruises and bumps. "What on Earth has been happening here?" She asked in curiosity, "Never-mind, Well come here." She said bossily pulling the boy in as she bent down. "Episkey!" she muttered. "I don't know, students these days.

She smiled a wry smile as she turned to prepare the hiccup potion she'd need tomorrow. Those accident prone third years were practicing hiccup solutions in potions tomorrow.

I felt like writing this one too just incase the other one wasn't better.

Madame Pomfrey sighed as she scrubbed the floors of the hospital wing. Only recently being hired by the Headmistress as the Head Nurse made her a bit...nervous to say the least. She had left her Comfortable Minisrty Job to pursue this one. Protecting Children was what she had wanted to do ever scince being bullied as a child here at Hogwarts. She and Myrtle were best friends. Continuing to scrub. She heard the door creak open. What on Earth were students doing out of bed at this hour? Even to go to the hospital wing.

[Madame Garfungle]

History (Where did they come from? Did they have a good Childhood? Bad? How did they spend their time as a child?)-

Early Childhood- I was a Child who learned everything early. First word was at age 2 and was "more". Went to a muggle primary school and was top in the grade. Was teased because of her weight.

Hogwarts years- Teasing continued at Hogwarts but made a few nice friends such as Myrtle Kowaski. Continued as Top of year. During fifth year Myrtle was murdered and Poppy lost dramatic weight and began making more friends and then graduated top of her year.

Ministry Experience- Some experience with Ministry as one of their top trainee nurses and came to work in Hogwarts second year out of trainee ship